Responding To Student's Writing

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After reading the essays for several times, I finally came out with some responses to this student's essay. For me, this essay is well constructed. Although still has some sentences are not that well written, but the flow of the story line was smooth and me as the reader could understand what was the essay about. The student was able to include the introduction, body paragraph and also the conclusion. This means that the student can construct an essay that is understandable.

However, this essay also contains some grammatical problem such as not alert in using the capital letters in most of the new sentences, not using the correct punctuation and very limited vocabulary, causing the student to use direct translation in his or her essay.

Overall, I think that this student has done a good job in producing this essay and of course there are still a lot to be improved by practicing more in writing an essay, just like the old saying : Practice makes Perfect.

For the record, I used some symbols when correcting this essay and the symbols are as follow :